Any one besides me write any poetry here? If ya up to it post ya work.

I got bored recently at like 5 am, and wrote this.

Artistic Expression

The beautiful color
Sprayed on a wall
the knife is my brush
the walls are my canvas
your blood is my paint

the beauty of death
murder is an art form
the witness is my student
this victim a subject
I am the teacher

quite morbid.

HAHAHAHA, Beautiful, man, Beautiful.

I'd suggest laying off of <saying> you're in pain though, if you want a strong effect, and lean more toward the cause of the pain, or trying to get the reader to feel the same pain; however, that's only a suggestion. Good stuff, and keep at it.

actually he's right, I think it flows nicer without the pain line.

I think this was a good thread to start though, so let's keep it up, neh?


My little addition to the party:

Can you see the little cuts
Can you see the little scars
Don?t run from me you little fucks
Let me show you who you are

Sit down now and shut up
You?re about to take a ride
Stay right there, don?t dare get up
You?re about to see the other side

Tear out your heart, give it to me
She gave hers up to you
Watch me burn and stab, you?ll see
Every terrible thing she went through

She is love and innocence
She showed me that God is real
I can see your soul and how it?s bent
As I crush your heart beneath my heel

Enjoy your little stay in Hell
I hope you learned just what you should
I pray you feel, I wish you well
All you have to do now is be good

^ i like that, plus your right about it flowin better with out the pain.

<!--QuoteBegin-Lib3rty0x+Apr 12 2004, 01:28 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Lib3rty0x @ Apr 12 2004, 01:28 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> ^ i like that, plus your right about it flowin better with out the pain. [/quote]
Thank you. ^_^

I'd recite my poetry here, as it is much like you guys', except without the good part.

I'll second that Llama......Mines exactly the same, without the goodness and sense making.

I just can't write it.

Excellent job Lamp.

zen:
i stumble, and fall
the ground is there
but it doesn't touch me
i just keep fallin

I feel this heat
boiling off my skin
It rips my mask away

I come though the other side
breathing a different way
I see you there mocking me
you never leave me alone

Some one please just
make it all go away
I don't want to feel these things
I just want to be sane

Some one please just
help me out
just make me feel ok
Some one please just help me

I Return to my self
bleeding and screaming
they pull the needle
and i become real again

Sitting there
I think about what I've seen
maybe I'm fucked for a reason
maybe its never going to be ok

Some one please just
Make it all go away
I Just want to feel nothing
I just want to die today

No one can understand
why i feel this way
but its ok now
I need this to be me

(end)

Once again anthore very late night, very bored and depressed. Some really like this one, some really hate it.

theyre all good but lets write something happy guys ....... i'll post some of mine when i can be bothered to go through my GCSE work and find em!

I'd like to see some happy stuff if you've got some!

I've tryed to write happy things befor lol, it sorta worked. Post your happy stuff creepy.

will do. not a lot of it makes sence though im warning you

<!--QuoteBegin-The Lamperus+Apr 14 2004, 12:42 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (The Lamperus @ Apr 14 2004, 12:42 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I'd like to see some happy stuff if you've got some! [/quote]
As for some not so happy stuff...
Holy shit I was just Xanga surfing (haha, I'm really bored) and I found a friend of mine's xanga, and he had a poem he wrote on there (his name's Jeff Smith) and holy god it's good.


here it is, he didnt have a name for it

my eyes bleed for the life you live
and my tears fall for the hate you give
the blackness consumes me deep inside
the things i feel i cannot hide
and thats why i feel no remorse
as i bludgeon your body...
your ghostly corpse
what i need you helped me feel
now i seek your soul to steal
my fingers tremble as the knife slides in
blood pouring out and the tear of the skin
i cover your lips as the screams escape
your body blisters and your wounds gape
you fall lifeless to the ground
in a pool of blood you lay and drown
now i lay you down to sleep
in a hole thats 6 feet deep
remember me in your dreams
for ill always hear your ghastly screams

Silence

Silence becomes my master
It tells me when to act
It tells me how to feel
It becomes me...

Silence is my master
It controls how I act
It controls how I feel
It is me.....

I want to kill my master
I want to be set free
I want to kill my master
I want to be set free

Silence was my master
It no longer holds me down
It no longer controls me
It ends me....

Just a thought, but why are they all so morbidly depressive?

happy poems are far superior
also, if you are trying for morbid poetry dont fill them with so much Angst.

lamp i really liked yours

my point exactly.....a couple of pages ago! lol!

but theyre good all the same

I;'d say the reason these are all depressing are that most people on this site are aged bertween 12 and 18..... now unless u've already been through it most are in that annoying nialistic phase we all go through (for some people it is nialism, for others it's depression) I on the other hand have been through it so now don't write poetry, songs or anything else cos I still can only write depressing crap and don't like feeling that way anymore.... even though I probibly have more reason than a lot of kids I know.....

Revival!!!!!!

Untitled, as all my poems always are.

Every time i close my eyes
your image invades my dreaming guise
seeing you i dont hate or despise
I can feel something hidden arise

Just as soon as I saw your face
It forced me to want that sweet embrace
Wrap my arms around and never let go
These feelings of love, may they forever grow

I'll be there when you call my name
I hope that you would do the same
Nothing at all could keep me away
My only wish is that I could stay...
I may have to go but I'll always return
Because not seeing you would be the ultimate burn...

<span style='colorurple'>Last Kiss
I've lost my whole being,
I feel empty inside,
The only thing keeping me here,
Is the way that I hide.
I love you more than anything,
& nothing will stand in my way,
I will keep you on my mind,
Each & every day.
Every kiss you gave me,
Every smile you made,
It brought up my deepest pain,
But then everything began to fade.
So please don't be upset,
If I give up too soon,
I'll see you again one day,
Underneath the stars & moon.
The same ones,
That we once kissed under before,
I'll be with you again,
& have that one last kiss once more.</span>

a silly poem i wrote when i was 13

If life is a chain

If depression is emotion
and emotion is devotion
then why aren't all of us
devoted to depression?

If emotion has no boundaries
and boundaries are edges
then does emotion have
an edge on human beings?

If life has left no weakness
and a weakness is a sickness
then does sickness not exist
unto the world?

If I write a poem
and the poem has no rhyming
then is rhyming
necessary to a poem?

If all names have a meaning
and we base our names on nothing
do we care what our
children even mean?

If I help a human being
and it's something I am doing
does that really mean
that I'm a human doing?

If I end this poem
and an ending is just stopping
does that mean that
I'll resume this when I'm done?

I also managed to squeeze out a short story not too long ago. If anyone is interested in reading it, IM me sometime InfiltrationDown (AOL) and i'll send it to you. It's only about 4 pages long.